I feel cool and fresh
Because of you
But when it becomes summer
you makes people sad
You makes people throw into despair
Because of you
If you go journey to a desert
You makes ground to be hopeful
You gives a new lives
Because of you
When you come to autumn
You makes people in a big though.
You makes people become sentimental
Because of you
When you come to winter
You changes to snow
And you makes children to harbor expectations
Because of you
You can change your outward appearance
You can give a different emotions to people
You can give a new lives
So we can't forget your existence
Hyunjoon,
답글삭제Kudos on you effort in tackling a unique subject! This is a fine ode, and it would have been better if you proofread your basic grammatical errors ("You makes" etc). Your line "because of you" would have been more effective if it was related to other ideas in that stanza. In addition, you might want to pat close attention to connections that you are trying to make in each stanza to convey a clearer message. For example:"When you come to winter/You become snow/You make children harbor expectations"
*pay close attention
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